Author: Emma Kent my mastery

I'm Ms. Emma, Librarianship is what I do, but its time to do more. It is high time I learn how to conquer my fear of rejection.

ROUGH CUT; My weekly reflection

This week was defiantly a rough week.

For my Rough Cut video I used still shots using Adobe Spark. I have falling in love with this app. It allows me to tell a story using pictures and words. I am not the Director, but I enjoyed learning the difference between what a director and a producer does in our Linkin Learning Videos. I am going to miss having access to those files after graduation.

This week was rough because I suffer from vertigo and all week I have been sick. spinning rooms, and spinning head. We created our Rough Cut videos and gave feedback to other students on their Rough Cuts videos, and I still had to show up for work spinning head or not.

Please see the link to my video reflection for my Rough Cut Week.

https://spark.adobe.com/post/tITBpqoyLL8Az/

Revisions for a scene; based on feedback

Emma Kent, Revised Script for a scene.

The feedback for my revision was helpful. It was true; the scene I chose does not have a clear, singular protagonist.  The feedback also shares that I should try adding more dialogue and action lines to characterize Delvin, which would help establish him as a clear protagonist.  I did add more action lines and more dialogue.

I chose this scene to establish the moment when Octavia hears Delvin’s voice. She does not meet him in this scene; she only hears his voice, which brings her to tears. She also is not aware that he is dating her daughter.

The feedback I received also stated that Octavia should have something the audience can identify with and something that could clarify her role.  I told a bit more of her story within her dialogue.

The feedback stated that the scene does not have a clear, external antagonist and obstacle. The reason the obstacle is not clear is that this is not the scene where this happens.

Feedback stated that there is a hint of an impediment to the voiceover about Delvin’s girlfriend’s brother, but it is unclear how this is a problem. I rewrote his voice over to make it more transparent.

The feedback stated that perhaps this obstacle would be evident if Delvin and Octavia were to have a confrontation. They will eventually have an encounter just not in this scene. I also rewrote my voice over as dialogue, which was a critique as it related to the 20 script list.